Logline Hospital (powered by Script Pipeline)
An effective log line - short, catchy, intriguing - is a key to enticing others to take a look at your script. However, writing a great log line isn't as easy as it looks, so to help you get more attention for your scripts, we created the Logline Hospital, powered by our friends at Script Pipeline. Each week, Script Pipeline will pick two needy loglines from the scripts with the most votes and give them an Extreme Makeover, Talentville style.
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Housed in a retro RV parked on the beach, a ragtag family of psychics make a living on reading palms and pulling cons. But when they pull one con too many and lose everything,...
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Be sure to look through the nominated log lines and vote for the ones you think are most in need of a stay in the Logline Hospital.
Walking Through Wednesday by Donna Coulstring
Released on April 12 2013
The lives of three sisters intersect following the death of their mother, but when each sister's tragic past is revealed, they must find a way to put these ghosts to rest.
Before Treatment:
Three sisters lives intersect following the death of their mother and they try to lay the ghosts of their pasts to rest, but will they?
Pangaea's Fall by wayne taylor
Released on April 12 2013
A master fighter and expert gambler has seven days to pay a debt or face death, but unknown to him, the end of the world is near. [based on longer synopsis]
Before Treatment:
A young man struggles against insurmountable odds to save his life, not knowing the end of the world is near.
The Orchid with the Petals of Velvet by Justin Kosch
Released on March 29 2013
A woman must protect herself when she discovers she's at the center of a killer's rage, a madman murdering the women of a Nevada brothel.
Before Treatment:
The beautiful women of the Melody Ranch, a brothel in Nevada, are dying at the hands of a madman. Gia, at the center of the killer's rage, must protect herself before she becomes the next victim.
Whorl by Brittany Lamoureux
Released on March 15 2013
A man quickly spiraling into insanity goes on a killing spree, but the souls of his victims are none too happy and may enact revenge on their murderer.
Before Treatment:
Travis, a man who is quickly spiraling into insanity, goes on a killing spree. Unfortunately, the souls of his victims are none too happy about it.
Springtime Hollow by John-Luke Valden
Released on March 15 2013
In this musical, Johnny and his childhood friend, an anthropomorphic rabbit, are reunited after several years and begin a new series of adventures. [based on longer synopsis]
Before Treatment:
The adventures of a boy and his talking rabbit friend, who reunite as adults.
Because of the Mural by Gretchen Elhassani
Released on March 08 2013
A shopaholic in credit card debt agrees to take a bribe from her son’s artistic friend in order to let him paint a mural on her wall, but when the portrait turns out to be that of a nude woman, her life begins to unravel. [based on longer synopsis]
Before Treatment:
Soon-to-be-divorced Lisa deals with her crisis by shopping, resulting in a mural of a naked woman on her wall.
The Braca Twins by JJ Womack
Released on March 08 2013
A high school senior president experiences paranoia and hallucinations when a set of twin sisters attend the school's orientation.
Before Treatment:
A high school senior President begins to hallucinate and experience paranoia when a set of twin sisters attend the school's orientation.
3D by Zachary Sasim
Released on March 01 2013
Through a supernatural event, fate helps an aspiring screenwriter break into the film industry.
Before Treatment:
Fate helps an aspiring screenwriter to break into the film industry through a supernatural event.
Guardian's Way by Autumn Sims
Released on March 01 2013
Six unlikely heroes must persuade other Guardians to relinquish their amulets, through wit and honor, to prevent a false god from taking over the world. [based on longer synopsis]
Before Treatment:
Six dream connected heroes save the world from a false God.
Trouble With Parapente by Yana Gibbs
Released on February 08 2013
A retired NYC detective and a Boston lawyer-turned-gardener join forces in managing a luxurious Caribbean rental property, soon finding themselves solving their client's problems week-to-week.
Before Treatment:
A retired NYC private detective and a Bostonian lawyer reconverted into gardener join their forces in managing a Caribbean luxurious vacation rental and find themselves solving their weekly clients's problems.
The Case of The Empty Case by Alan von Altendorf
Released on February 08 2013
A private eye finds himself in a jam that goes from bad to worse--in trouble with cops, shadowed by the feds, and out of money, he receives a mysterious clue that drives him to challenge a gang boss, which could be a solution to all his problems.
Before Treatment:
Private eye Chris Cable is in a jam that gets worse and worse. He's in trouble with the cops. Being shadowed by the Feds. He's out of money and there's a mysterious clue someone left at his office door. Gut instinct drives him to challenge a gang boss, 100% certain that this isn't going to turn out very nicely.
The Juggling Act by vin conzo
Released on January 25 2013
At wit's end with his miserable home life, a man leading a double life takes solace with his second family while fighting to keep his high-paying job.
Before Treatment:
At wit's end with his miserable home life, a man takes solace with his "second family," while fighting to keep his high paying job.
Liberated by Leslie Flannery
Released on January 25 2013
Super mechanic Denis feels unappreciated and won't take it anymore, so he socks it to the man by stealing a plane, but swiping an aircraft and getting away with it are two very different things.
Before Treatment:
Michael Douglas in Falling Down has a baby with Ben Stiller in the Parent's series and they call him Denis Leary in Liberated. Super mechanic, Denis, feels unappreciated and won't take it anymore. He socks it to the man by stealing a plane and actually gets away with it.
Mother Mayhem by Brian Smith
Released on January 18 2013
A vengeful spirit executed during the early witch hunts terrorizes the small-town descendants of her killers.
Before Treatment:
The vengeful spirit of Amanda Craver, accused and executed during the early witch hunts, terrorizes the small-town descendants of her killers.
Chasing Dreams by Jack Middleton
Released on January 11 2013
Two friends, fed up with their lives and eager for a fresh start, change identities while vacationing in Central America, but their decision leads to a dangerous mix-up that makes them the target of a crooked oil baron.
Before Treatment:
Two friends, fed up with their lives and eager for a fresh start, change identities and become the target of a crooked oil baron while vacationing in Central America.
Generations by Julie OBrien
Released on January 11 2013
To help an old friend, four generations of female thieves must acquire a deed to their friend's unspoiled land before it's permanently turned into a tourist trap by a corrupt businessman.
Before Treatment:
Four generations of female thieves help an old friend keep his family land out of the control of his evil brother.
Hallow's Point by Brian Smith
Released on January 07 2013
During a weekend book tour, a bestselling author of vampire novels fears the residents of Hallow's Point are blending her fiction with reality, and with the help of her feisty publicist and a photographer, she uncovers a forgotten past and a power within that may be her only hope to survive.
Before Treatment:
On a weekend book tour in an oceanside town, Lisa Derrin, a bestselling author of vampire novels, fears the welcoming residents are blending her fiction with reality. Joined by her feisty publicist and a handsome photographer, Lisa will uncover a forgotten past and a power within that may be their only hope to survive. In Hallow's Point, stay the night...live forever.
LOVE AND POISON by Diana Smith
Released on January 07 2013
The discovery of a stolen box carrying a poisonous snake could mean disaster for a Queen and a knight, who share a romantic history.
Before Treatment:
A knight found a stolen box that belongs to the Queen. His servant Larry opens the box. There is a poison snake in the box. Larry doesn't tell his master about the snake. The knight gives the Queen her box. The Queen demands the knight to rise his visor. She recognizes her missing lover. The snake comes out from the box and kills the knight and the Queen.
DON'T KISS THE WITCH by Diana Smith
Released on December 22 2012
Two young boys develop an unlikely friendship after rescuing a beautiful mermaid from beguiling sirens and an evil witch.
Before Treatment:
“Don't Kiss the Witch” is a magical sea adventure about two young boys – one lonely and privileged, the other angry and mistreated – who develop an unlikely friendship after spending their “school” day rescuing a beautiful mermaid from beguiling sirens and an evil witch.
Preternatural by Scott Stonehocker
Released on November 30 2012
A preternatural necromancer with questionable people skills, Solomon Black pursues a sexy witch, leading him into an age-old conflict between genocidal angel-kin and ancient pagan powers. [based on alternate logline/synopsis]
Before Treatment:
Solomon Black and the Vegas Pagans confront angels, demons and ancient powers when they attend a paranormal convention in San Francisco.
THAT DRESS by Diana Smith
Released on November 26 2012
A gentleman's dreams come true when the rain shrinks a sexy lady's dress. [short script]
Before Treatment:
The lady with the dog meets a gentleman who dreams about a sexy girl. His dreams come true when the rain shrinks the lady's dress.
RICH WITH MOM"S LOVE by Diana Smith
Released on November 26 2012
In order to prevent her teenage son from being drafted by a corrupt military, a Russian mother flees for America, but when their ship sinks, leaving them penniless, she must fight back to build a new life for her and her son. [based on longer synopsis]
Before Treatment:
A Russian mother leaves her wealthy life behind and becomes a struggling immigrant in America in order to prevent her teenage son from being drafted by the army.
TOO PRETTY TO MARRY by Diana Smith
Released on November 16 2012
A transsexual girl, Mary, abandoned by her lover, receives an offer from a street girl to murder her lover's new partner, but the girl has other intentions for Mary. . . .
Before Treatment:
Mary, a transsexual girl, is heart broken when her lover left her. Bibi, the street girl, offers to kill the rival , but she only milks Mary for money. Finally the Bibi's husband explains to Mary with his fist the priority of beauty and love.
BONUS TO PAY FOR DINOSAUR BLOOD by Diana Smith
Released on November 16 2012
After a Russian spy's beautiful decoy falls for his young assistant, she becomes marked for assassination--at the hands of her new lover.
Before Treatment:
A Russian spy works in a third country. His goal is to receive a signed contract for the importation of crude oil. He arranges the pretty blond as a decoy duck. Later the pretty blond falls in love with the spy's young assistant, Peter. She gets pregnant and wants to get married. To do so, Peter must ask his superior for permission. The boss orders Peter to kill the girl. The agent, Gluewater, enforces the order. The time passes by. Nothing reminds Peter about his love affair until he meets a blond dancer in the night club show. His memory comes back.
Gatekeeper to the Worlds by Kari Ciardi
Released on November 12 2012
A teenage girl born on another plant is summoned home to prevent an inter-planetary cataclysm, but first, she must battle a nemesis that will stop at nothing to possess her--and her unimaginable power.
Before Treatment:
Born on a faraway world and hidden on Earth, a teenage girl with unimaginable power is summoned home to perform an ancient ceremony which will prevent an inter-planetary cataclysm, but first she must battle a nemesis that will stop at nothing to possess her and the forces that reside within her.



