Drama • 102 Pages
| Horror, Suspense/Thriller
Posted: Sep 09, 2012
Your concept is intriguing and unique (as far as I know) and is something I would watch. The stories intertwined well and the dialogue, except for a few places, sounded natural. I liked the character\'s names also. The premise, and your writing, shows a good deal of talent and promise. Unfortunately for me, the story gets so bogged down with all the unnecessary camera directions (pg. 27 CAMERA ZOOMS INTO A WATERY EYE), descriptions that are too detailed and too many characters, that I lost my way.
I realize it\'s an ensemble piece but 18 speak...