Talentville Mini-Coverage for Five Kinds Of Lonely

Professional Coverage • 4 pages

Uploaded: Nov 11, 2014 | Viewed by: 18 Members

Five Kinds of Lonely is heartfelt and explores the lives of five completely different characters, intertwining their stories as each face typical problems of their particular age group. A lot of the plot hinges on the location of the story in Vermont and the small town high school track and field team, which are both rather unique and unfamiliar in most stories these days. There are great ideas and originality in the script, however as it stands now the individual character stories are not structured to agree with one another and thus much of the drama gets lost. Too much, ultimately, is forced into the story, making some of the conflict feel contrived and making problems feel superficial.

Talentville Mini-Coverage for Snuff

Professional Coverage • 5 pages

Uploaded: Nov 11, 2014 | Viewed by: 22 Members

Snuff is a pretty dark and bleak thriller whose basic premise has potential, combining elements of survival (the flood plotline) as well as crime (the snuff film plotline). There are some good visual moments throughout, from the horrific flood to the very explicit, disgusting snuff films. The big question is whether these disparate aspects belong in the same screenplay, as written it almost feels as though we are in a totally different movie after the first act, which detracted from the overall cohesiveness of the story. The protagonist's motivation, wanting justice for his dead sister, is strong, identifiable and credible, which is a positive, but even so the story ends up veering off t

Talentville Mini-Coverage for Monsters of Hollywood - The Meeting

Professional Coverage • 4 pages

Uploaded: Nov 11, 2014 | Viewed by: 17 Members

Monsters of Hollywood is a half hour sitcom pilot that combines some of the more comedic elements of vampire and mythical creatures with a fun nod to modernity, but it currently lacks needed character depth and plot focus. From a high level perspective, on the plus side, misunderstood movie monsters descending on Hollywood in an attempt to change the way they are perceived does have potential. Some of the dialogue is fun, the Van Helsing character is a great addition, and Vlad's delusional personality creates a fun opportunity for comedic relief. However, as the script stands now, it is missing a simple, easy to follow plot, a clear series setup and sufficient character development and bac

Talentville Mini-Coverage for The Snake

Professional Coverage • 3 pages

Uploaded: Jul 11, 2014 | Viewed by: 50 Members | Downloaded by: 4 Members

Good man versus nature (twisted nature) setup here, with the payoff being that even in these extreme circumstances, human nature is still our biggest threat. It's handled reasonably well, if not in scope, then in action, though it treads very popular ground. The simplicity of the wide open countryside after a zombie apocalypse isn't something we've really seen on screen before and it could be very cinematic. Throw in a couple of desperate travelers who don't know each other, forced to work together and it has all the cohesive pieces of a movie. Another pass that turns Hudson and Clint's early back and forth into more conflict filled and goal oriented action may keep the first half movi

Talentville Mini-Coverage for Storm Dragons

Professional Coverage • 4 pages

Uploaded: Jul 11, 2014 | Viewed by: 31 Members | Downloaded by: 2 Members

Fantasy is always a hard sell because the writer has to cultivate a whole new world with a whole new set of laws with which the characters must navigate. Storm Dragons managed to do just that, very smoothly weaving in new details about the storm dragon world and those who inhabit it. However, the story itself is not able to communicate emotional impact well, putting most of the emotion into the fight sequences, which were many. Overall, the marketability of this film may be limited because it features a lot of fantasy and is a true action film, but there is not much to be marketed for anyone who isn't a fan of either genre. So, while the setting is beautiful, the story itself is not b

Talentville Coverage for JOY

Professional Coverage • 1 page

Uploaded: Jul 11, 2014 | Viewed by: 34 Members | Downloaded by: 2 Members

JOY is difficult to get behind for a couple of reasons. Many consider movies about movies to be too insidery. While that's a sentiment I don't agree with (see THE PLAYER), they do need to walk a fine line between verisimilitude and widespread appeal. Unfortunately, JOY doesn't walk that line because it's neither truthful nor universal enough to pull in an audience. Much of this comes down to the characters, but the sagging structure and lack of propulsion also play a big part. Small dramas need an interesting hook to pull in audiences. JOY doesn't have one. Even for an independent film, that's simply not enough to put butts in seats. While there is some snappy dialogue, it doesn't have

Talentville Mini-Coverage for Rex and The Doggy Style Killer

Professional Coverage • 3 pages

Uploaded: May 09, 2014 | Viewed by: 24 Members | Downloaded by: 1 Member

Every great horror script, even the comedic ones, is a mystery, and ultimately the mystery should lead us to the identity and motivation of the killer. Unfortunately for Rex & the Doggie Style Killer, which has a very strong beginning, the identity of the killer is revealed so soon that the story flat lines due to a lack of mystery or suspense. The script does have its strong elements: the setting and world of Panama City, FL at spring break is a great premise for a horror script and there's a strong sense of pace and forward momentum. It is also refreshing to see a comedy that's perfectly willing to fill the screen with exposed flesh and buckets of blood, in the name of cheap but legi

Talentville Mini-Coverage for LOVE ME DEAD

Professional Coverage • 3 pages

Uploaded: Mar 11, 2014 | Viewed by: 33 Members

Overall the story needs to cut some time spent with extraneous characters and focus on the arcs of the characters that will drive the plot. The genre needs to be decided upon, and the themes brought to the surface through the plot. If Love Me Dead is going to be a marketable film then it must be easy to follow and must set a clear context for the audience from the beginning. Looking at films like Monster, Fatal Attraction, and The Tenant might help to see how masters have used their genre to tell fascinating stories about characters on the edge of sanity while maintaining a strong balance of sympathy for their protagonists.
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