This is a well-written, action-packed fantasy script with strong characters, an interesting premise, and tons of dazzling visuals. In short, this is a script with potential for commercial success in the current fantasy-focused market. While the script is by and large gripping and excellent, issues with clarity and structure hold it back from a recommendation. But a high level of potential and polish is there, and with some revision, this is a script that could easily move into ‘recommend’ territory.

The best aspects of the script are the establishment of the characters in the first act, the quality and scale of the visual creations, and the interesting duality of Aaron and Valery’s roles and godly parents. Weaker aspects are the lack of further development of Valery after she is killed at the end of the first act, less explanation/setup for the events in the later part of the second and third acts, and the aforementioned structure. As the weaknesses are mostly concentrated in the last 40 pages, the majority of the comments focus on this section.