Talentville Coverage for Eye Needles

At the end of the day Eye Needles does not quite have enough fully fleshed out characters or complete plot at this stage of development. The initial premise is intriguing and could be the basis for a taught thriller; however, as it stands the characters have not been developed enough where their actions and motivations are believable in the current narrative. Descriptions are usually evocative and set up the atmosphere of the settings well, however sometimes they can run too long, the writer should consider trimming down where possible. If steps are taken to implement a more complete arc for the protagonist and tighten the plot then this has the potential to be an engaging thriller.